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Old 07 Nov 2005, 20:29   #1 (permalink)
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Hey all,

I have just written background for the Bronze Pilgrims Chapter, a new Space Marines chapter I am planning on collecting. Anyway, if you have the patience to sit and read this, could anyone validate the story and suggest changes or amendments if there are any inaccuracies with current 40k fluff or feel it should be fleshed out a bit more? I have listed the Chapter Traits as well, along with explainations that help to make them fit in with the Chapters history. Sorry if this is in the wrong forum, but I felt it was more Space Marine orientated than general fluff orientated, so I just posted it here. C&C very welcome.

Edit: - Fluff updated

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Background
Originating from their homeworld of Varik III, a large moon orbiting the Gas Giant of Varik, and originally named the Bronze Trojans, the Bronze Pilgrims are a chapter with a grim and tragic history.

Varik is a massive Gas Giant in the Casselius System. Varik III is a large moon, more planet-sized than usual. A warm, Mediterranean climate, large land masses around the equator and a wealth of Iron and Tungsten minerals made Varik III a prime region for colonisation during the early days of space exploration. The moon’s inhabitants built huge stone, Romanesque cities close to the mountains in the center of the continents, and on the coasts where they built mines and mineral refineries to exploit the natural resources. It was in the mountains that the first of the Bronze Trojan chapter built their Fortress Monastery, expanding deep into the derelict mines, transforming them into grand Librariums, Relic Chambers and Training Arenas.

During the Bronze Trojans early existence, Varik III often became the target of Eldar and Iron Warrior raids. The Bronze Trojans specialised in the defence of the huge cities, bolstered by the local Varik Imperial Guard regiments. They have a distinct fighting style, preferring devastators and heavy weapons, but yet well equipped for close combat. The Bronze Trojans had to be prepared for both blasting masses of tanks and heavy infantry, and bitter melees on the city walls. Centuries of raids were repelled with relative ease, before they gradually ceased altogether. Varik Imperial Guardsmen roles became largely ceremonial, their weapons and training unwisely neglected, and the Bronze Trojans were employed in more and more off-world missions, their defensive skills invaluable in many battles and sieges.

Little is known about how the Word Bearers arrived on Varik III undetected, in such numbers or for what purpose, only that they did. A single night of hellish bloodshed ensued across the moon, the local ill-equipped Imperial Guard regiments overwhelmed by the numbers and ferocity of the Traitor Marines. Bolstered by rank upon rank of foul daemons, the traitors swarmed into the cities, killing all in their path. Most of the populous were slaughtered or taken from their beds for bloody sacrifice, the survivors fleeing into the mines to their deaths at the hands of countless daemons that awaited there.

The Bronze Trojans were slow to respond to the attack. Moving to counter the Word Bearers at the capital city of Roemus, they met with huge resistance. However, after hours of brutal fighting, they managed to force their way into and reclaim large parts of the city. Bronze Pilgrim losses were grievous however, the entire 2nd, 3rd, 5th and 6th companies decimated in battle, and the 1st, 4th and 8th companies suffering heavy losses. The Terminators of the first company drove their way through the last remaining horde of daemons in the city center, but one fell after another until at last Chapter Master Raefellus was cut down by a greater daemon of Khorne. After more hours of fighting on the ruined city walls alongside the few survivors of the 27th Varik regiment, the defenders witnessed grey drop pods descending onto the plains below. Power Armoured warriors swarmed out, cutting swathes of the daemons with their huge halberds. Suspicious about this new threat, the defenders held their ground – none of the Librarians had knowledge of these warriors, and were unsure about the intentions of this new force.

The Ordo Malleus had ordered a secretive force of elite warriors to counter the Word Bearers attack, and to discover the reason they were there. Hours of fighting across the planet, most heavily outside the capital brought the attackers to bay. As the warriors slaughtered daemons and drove deeper into the mines, it seemed that the Word Bearers disappeared as suddenly as they had arrived.

The surviving civilians were rounded up and placed in Penal Camps by the Inquisition. The few Guardsmen of the Varik 27th regiment were led to the mountains and never seen again. The populace were put to the sword and the remaining Bronze Trojans detained in their fortress Monastery while they were subjected to countless purity tests.

However, the Word Bearers seemed to have a vested interest in Varik III and returned days later. Countless cultists, Traitor Marines and Daemons swarmed from the mines and engulfed the deserted cities. The Ordo Malleus forces returned, but gradually lost ground against the chaos forces. The imprisoned Bronze Trojans could only sit by as the Ordo Malleus ordered an Exterminatus on Varik III. Inquisitor Auron, satisfied with the purity and dedication of the remaining Bronze Trojans ordered them to be freed, against the wishes of his fellows.

The huge losses suffered by the Bronze Trojans, and the effective destruction of their homeworld has resulted in the renaming of the Bronze Trojans to the Bronze Pilgrims. The Chapter remains embittered by their losses, severely under strength, even several hundred years later, but is gradually rebuilding. Even though the Chapter was deemed pure, it still remains under scrutiny from the Inquisition, and as such, now seeks repentance. Many of the veterans and captains were killed in the battle for Roemus, and a new Chapter Master was chosen from the younger officers. His leadership is carefully watched over by the Chapters Librarians, who take the liberty of ensuring purity within the troops, and rigorously test new initiates for taint. In a manner of repentance, the Librarians also maintain strict guidelines on the use of Psychic powers and ensure that the Codex Astartes is rigidly adhered to within the Chapter. However, many of the Chapter’s Relics and knowledge were destroyed in the orbital bombardment that will take millennia to replace, if at all.

Varik III is now a deathworld, but it is showing signs of slowly recovering, marshland and swamps growing back in the deeper valleys. However, most of the moon’s surface is now ash, dust and sand. The Bronze Pilgrims now abides in a Monastery Ship, orbiting within the clouds of Varik. They hold a debt to Inquisitor Auron, often fighting alongside him on his quests to destroy chaos. Varik III remains of interest to the Inquisition, as they believe some evil is buried deep in the derelict mines there. The Excommunicate Traitor Inquisitor Charnos is currently believed to be working there, and a member of the Ordo Hereticus has been dispatched to seek evidence of him there.

Traits

Honour Your Wargear – Bronze Pilgrim’s are expert in the use of heavy weapons. The most elite of the Devastators are highly skilled in the arts of anit-tank warfare. They understand how vehicles behave, in much the same way that a good hunter understands how his prey behaves.

Trust Your Battle-Brothers – Bronze Pilgrim’s are adept at bitter wall fighting where a strong arm and sharp sword in the hand are just as important as a bolter in the other.

Faithful Unto Death – The Chapter is severely under strength, many of the veteran troops killed in action during the battle for the Roemus.

Aspire to Glory – The Chapter was forced to abandon its Fortress Monastery when the Exterminatus was ordered, along with many artefacts, relics and suits of Terminator Armour which are now buried under the ruins. It will take millennia for the Bronze Pilgrims to acquire, recover and repair this equipment.
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Im not an expert on Space Marines but this fluff is well written and does not seem to contradict anything. The Grey Knights would perhaps be better referenced as an Unknown chapter as they are highly secretive and the Bronze Pilgrims would likely be sworn to secrecy if not destroyed for their knowledge. Also it would be unlikely that the officers would all be executed but the troops remain.

So perhaps remove the execution of the officers as it does not seem to fit and change the references to the grey knights as something more unknown and mysterious and it looks good to me. Well done.
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Old 08 Nov 2005, 18:29   #3 (permalink)
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Under the circumstances, I tend to think the Bronze Trojans would be regarded as a renegade chapter, and might seek repentance. How was chapter leadership re-established, and how was a new chapter master named? Do the Bronze Trojans still abide the Codex Astartes, and if so, who maintains the supervision of this chapter?

I seriously love this fluff! It's great!

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So perhaps remove the execution of the officers as it does not seem to fit and change the references to the grey knights as something more unknown and mysterious and it looks good to me. Well done.
Sounds better. The commanders are detained with the rest of the troops, however the Chapter Master was slain by a daemon of Khorne during the Battle for Roemus

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Under the circumstances, I tend to think the Bronze Trojans would be regarded as a renegade chapter, and might seek repentance.
I like this idea, even though the Chapter fought bravely, helped drive off the initial attack and passed all of their purity tests, I still somehow get the feeling that they would almost be in disgrace, and would seek repentance for this. Any fluff / gaming / ally / trait ideas that would go along with this?

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How was chapter leadership re-established, and how was a new chapter master named?
How exactly is a new Chapter Master usually chosen, rituals etc.?

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Do the Bronze Trojans still abide the Codex Astartes, and if so, who maintains the supervision of this chapter?
As part of their repentance, the Bronze Pilgrims now try to follow the Codex Astartes even closer.

Thanks for your comments guys, very much appreciated . I'll update the fluff later on, but I have some things to finish painting. Cheers again!
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Well with the new Black Templars codex coming out you could use their rules. I mean the Black Templars are trying to prove their worth... hmm, that does not sound worded right but whatever. Also the BT rules could probably suite the pilgrim feel aswell. You do not have to have a Dark Angels army to use the Dark Angel rules, or a Blood Angel paint scheme to use their rules. As long as you treat them as though they were a Black Templar army with a differant paint scheme you should have no troubles at all.

It could well be that since all the companies where annihilated or severely damaged that most of the captains were killed aswell just in the act of the defence. You could say that only one captain survived and he naturally became the new chapter master and reformed the survivors into new companies and named new captains and started the rebuilding process and so on and so forth.

Just a few ideas.
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Well with the new Black Templars codex coming out you could use their rules. I mean the Black Templars are trying to prove their worth... hmm, that does not sound worded right but whatever. Also the BT rules could probably suite the pilgrim feel aswell. You do not have to have a Dark Angels army to use the Dark Angel rules, or a Blood Angel paint scheme to use their rules. As long as you treat them as though they were a Black Templar army with a differant paint scheme you should have no troubles at all.

It could well be that since all the companies where annihilated or severely damaged that most of the captains were killed aswell just in the act of the defence. You could say that only one captain survived and he naturally became the new chapter master and reformed the survivors into new companies and named new captains and started the rebuilding process and so on and so forth.

Just a few ideas.
I like it . Using a Black Templar's army list may save me alot of hassle messing around with traits and the like. Although... do Black Templars have access to Devastators and heavy weapons, as they seem to be a more close-combat orientated army? Also, is the new Black Templar codex a supplement for Codex: Space Marines, or is it an independant supplement?

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I like the traits you have chosen.They really do fit the fluff well.

What the Bronze Pilgrims would need is strict supervision to ensure proper piety and a pure gene-seed source. Perhaps they maintain their foundling gene-seed from a predecessor chapter, and currently have a younger-than-average chapter master, who relies heavily on Chaplains for most field-leadership situations?

Also- you could make the argument that the chapter would have little to do with librarians, in that they are trying to uphold a reputation of purity, and view even the slightest semblance to Chaos sorcery as a violation.

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I like the traits you have chosen.They really do fit the fluff well.
Yeah, after giving it some thought I think it would be better to stick with the traits for the moment. I will still get the Black Templar codex and see what it has to offer, and I will probably use the Black Templar models, as they look kinda sweet and have the components to represent True Grit.

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What the Bronze Pilgrims would need is strict supervision to ensure proper piety and a pure gene-seed source. Perhaps they maintain their foundling gene-seed from a predecessor chapter, and currently have a younger-than-average chapter master, who relies heavily on Chaplains for most field-leadership situations?

Also- you could make the argument that the chapter would have little to do with librarians, in that they are trying to uphold a reputation of purity, and view even the slightest semblance to Chaos sorcery as a violation.
I like this, very interesting idea I didnt think of... but I love my Librarians :'( I could perhaps say that the Chaper's Librarians regard themselves not a psykers, but as gifted with "Powers of Faith", just like Sisters of Battle?
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If you like using librarians you could say that the psykers to insure the purity of the chapter from taint. Guiding them from battle to battle and verifying the purity of the chapter in concerns with chaos taint. Perhaps you could write that your chapters librarians follow the strictest of guidlines and new initiates are all submitted to more thorough tests than usual.
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The BTs tend to favor more CC, so I would not make use of them. Plus, they cannot, under any circumstances, have Librarians or psykers.

However, you've got a good thing going now, the only thing you could want to take advantage from the BTs is if anything from the new sprues look cool for your conversions.

The mix of heavy fire and CC is interesting. I'd assume I'd see Dev squads and Assault squads forming the bulk of your force. (Devs for the heavy fire, and Assault squads for the faster movement so they get into CC faster.)
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