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Old 29 Mar 2007, 11:24   #1 (permalink)
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Hi all. I suggested that we mayhaps have a poetry or creative writing board for those who want to share their work and it was suggested back that I test the waters by starting a poetry thread here. So here it is. I&#39;d like to put forward a few guidelines firstly:

1) Please feel free to review, critique or compliment any work. However, don&#39;t just criticize with no suggestions for improvement. Saying "it sucks" isn&#39;t constructive or respectful to the poster.

2) Please remember that all normal TO rules would apply. So no foul language, watch your content, and no flaming.

Thanks for reading...here it goes. As a note - this is free verse, normally I don&#39;t like writing free verse. So I do have other stuff. It just seemed like a good start.


Falling - by Eric c2000

Falling into nothing, no parachute to slow me
No ground to hit and be crushed upon
No end in sight, just emptiness...
Lonely, angry, confused, my emotions are my chains
and my heart is the weight around my feet.
Falling into nothing, yet feeling everything
As if all my senses were turned to full blast
except my common one.
Love-hate, hot-cold, all burn,
I&#39;m scorched beyond recognition, a mere ash
Tossed by the wind with no direction
except down, eventually.
Till then I&#39;m left falling incessantly
Screaming in silent agony. Deafeningly quiet
The emptiness says too much...take it away!
Why? How? When? Who? What? Where?
Questions are better left unanswered
Truth is bitter, but ignorance holds hope
Still falling, no wings
I sold them for hope, truth killed hope
That&#39;ll teach me...don&#39;t buy perishable goods
They end up perishing.
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Old 29 Mar 2007, 11:30   #2 (permalink)
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That was.... Interesting...

Now here is the one that I was forced to write for English class! It got me past a D+ for a grade! (If you cant tell from the grade, I am not the biggest fan of 19th century poetry...)

Ode to Thomas J. Crapper

As I sit here in this stink,
Never did I stop to think,
‘Bout the greatest man to ever live.
Who gave the gift that will always give.
Thomas J. Crapper

As I sit here on this Crapper.
Thinking ‘why oh why did I eat that cracker.’
I thank the porcelain-god,
Who never was a dog,
For a great man, Thomas J. Crapper.
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Old 29 Mar 2007, 11:41   #3 (permalink)
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I&#39;d like to share my work, but I write my poetry in italian... :-[
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Old 29 Mar 2007, 16:51   #4 (permalink)
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Originally Posted by Farseer_Emlyn
Falling - by Eric c2000

Falling into nothing, no parachute to slow me
No ground to hit and be crushed upon
No end in sight, just emptiness...
Lonely, angry, confused, my emotions are my chains
and my heart is the weight around my feet.
Falling into nothing, yet feeling everything
As if all my senses were turned to full blast
except my common one.
Love-hate, hot-cold, all burn,
I&#39;m scorched beyond recognition, a mere ash
Tossed by the wind with no direction
except down, eventually.
Till then I&#39;m left falling incessantly
Screaming in silent agony. Deafeningly quiet
The emptiness says too much...take it away!
Why? How? When? Who? What? Where?
Questions are better left unanswered
Truth is bitter, but ignorance holds hope
Still falling, no wings
I sold them for hope, truth killed hope
That&#39;ll teach me...don&#39;t buy perishable goods
They end up perishing.
Liked this one...

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I&#39;d like to share my work, but I write my poetry in italian... :-[
I have the same problem... All in Finnish.. Hey! If I learn to speak italian and you finnish!!! ;D
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What&#39;s going on here? I&#39;ve seen a kid, breasts, chopped eels, and a naked girl :P

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Old 29 Mar 2007, 19:22   #5 (permalink)
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If I learn to speak italian and you finnish!!! ;D
The only finnish words I know are Hirvi and Pissa... It&#39;s the only things you teached me ;D But I don&#39;t think it&#39;ll be cool to write a poem about a peeing moose :P
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Old 29 Mar 2007, 20:08   #6 (permalink)
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Martyr, martyr what did you die for?
Did you fall for honour?
Did you fall for glory?
Who will live to tell your story?

Walk through a closing door
Shunned by all but the arms of a whore
Turned away from the light
Nothing left but the will to fight

You hear the voices behind your back
Sword in hand you launch your attack
Gazing up into the starless sky
With a grin you’re ready to die

Feel their blood stain your hand
Despite the pain you manage to stand
Broken bodies pile up at your feet
It’s the Gods you’re willing to meet

Martyr, martyr where have you gone?
To lie beside heroes who’s light never shone?
Are you prepared to be forever forgotten in lore?
Martyr, martyr what did you die for?

Yes I wrote it.
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Old 29 Mar 2007, 22:09   #7 (permalink)
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Sorry, she said, pushing
a shopping cart in front
of her (with package of
six toilet paper rolls,
milk cartons stacked on top)

With hips like a goddess
of fertility, pair
of breasts like flea market
boxing gloves, maturing
face (textured like wood grain)

Sorry, she said, but not
to this world. She held a
phone to her pork-rind cheek
and spoke to it. Bet she
dies of a broken heart.
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Old 29 Mar 2007, 22:23   #8 (permalink)
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I feel that this is unfair to us Valar... ;D ;D
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Old 30 Mar 2007, 00:32   #9 (permalink)
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Post it in your respective languages, I&#39;m sure some people will apricated it
(If Finnish is of Germanic origin I&#39;ll understand some of it, and I know Italian is Latin, and I used to speak Latin very well, so at least Ill understand some of it!)
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Old 30 Mar 2007, 02:52   #10 (permalink)
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Got to put this one in, unsure who did it...

By Anonymous,

And when he went to heaven,
To St. Peter He would tell,
One man reporting for duty sir,
I&#39;ve served my time in hell.

June 6th, 1944, D-Day, over 176,000 men stormed the beaches of Normandy in order to break the german line and get to Berlin........

Nice commemoritive poem If you ask me...
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